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:iconsaintwalker1806:
Wow! Your stories are top-notch. You really capture the personalities of the characters! I've been trying my hand at writing (something I have never done or actually shown people before :D ). I think I have a ways to go after seeing some of these. (love to hear your thoughts and/or suggestions). Keep up the awesome work!
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:iconmaqeurious:
maqeurious Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much :D I write way better then I draw, so that's my bag for now.

Showing people my writing was incedibly frightening as I thought it was, well.. shit really. But that first time I got a positive review made all my worrying worth it. Of course you can't please everyone, but you do your best anyway.

I'm glad you found something to inspire yourself with while looking through mine. I always find myself thinking up silly stories in my head. Getting them on paper is a whole other matter through. Sometimes the brain and fingers just don't co-operate.

I see you are doing a collab piece with another writer. I have thought about this before. What is the process you both use?
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:iconsaintwalker1806:
Thanks for the wonderful reply! I felt the same way (completely terrified).

My whole thing started when I asked LiveAndLoveArt if I could use her Shepard/Children and do the Shepard Family Stories. She agreed, loved my work and asked if I would like to do a collab with her.

I agreed, not knowing exactly what that would entail. The process is not what you would expect. We use (Yahoo) messaging and we alternate writing every few paragraphs. It's a lot of fun, kinda like a game of chess. So each chapter really two people writing simultaneously. Most of the characters were designed by me, except for a small handful. (Lennata, Iysis, Nikolai).

I would love your opinions on any of my work. (Suggestions, questions, requests, whatnot).
As always keep up the amazing work :)
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:iconmaqeurious:
maqeurious Jun 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I've just spent the better half of an hour reading all of your chapters and they're quite good. You should be proud.

The Shepard Family Stories in particular really tickled my fancy. There are so many fanfics out there that focus on action and adventure (I'm guilty lol) that it was nice to read something that was totally different. They were short, to the point, and heartwarming (such as Mordins or Wrexs) which made reading them a delight. As for the actual writing, again it was very easy to read. Because of the kinds of stories I write and/or read, I tend to elaborate (overly in some cases. A bad habit) when describing scenes and emotion. These ficlits are a perfect example that you don't need to have a multi-sentenced paragraph to get your point across. I'm actually looking forward to any other installments you might write.

As for Path Among Stars, I'm liking the story you're weaving here. I hardly ever read OC stories, mainly because if it doesn't have characters we know and love in them, I tend to lose interest quickly. I love the idea of a bounty hunter (I've toyed with the idea myself) and this Lennata is turning out to be an interesting character. Her fight with Lewa in the second chapter was really well done too. A lot of people have difficulty writing action scenes, but this turned out great. When Scarab shot David and immediately regretted it, I thought... hello...maybe he's not so bad after all. Then when he saved Iysis, I must admit I had felt something there. His final words to her were a nice touch. I have a real soft spot for baddies turned goodies or reluctant heroes, (must be a chick thing :P) Quite the motley crew you're putting together.

There are a few spelling mistakes and paragraph anomalies, as well as this symbol that keeps popping up everywhere (lol), but I'm guessing that's the work of dA's upload option. Other then that, the story as a whole is quite interesting and the writing is really well done.

As writers, even amateurs like us, there is something to be said in practice practice practice. I read a crap-ton of books, mainly fantasy and take note on how they structure sentences, apply narrative and points of view.

Anyhow, this has gone on waaay to long, lol. I only wanted to point out that your stories are great work. I even looked up LiveAndLoveArts work to see the pics on the Ocs. This is something else I admire. Commitment to your own fantasy creation in both art and prose. Siigh... I wish I could draw all the characters I have in my head LOL.

Keep up the great work. Both of you :D
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:iconsaintwalker1806:
:D I am so glad you are enjoying my stories. Once I finally got my work out there, the fear started to subside XD. Seeing people enjoying the stories made me breathe a sigh of relief.

I have no plans to stop writing the SFS series. They are a lot of fun to write. I'm working on the second part of the Jack story. (Trying to figure out where to take it: Messing with liara (tattoos :P) or making it more heartwarming). I think these stories spawned from the desire for closure from the ending of ME3, (lots of little blue children as it were :D). If there are any characters you would personally like to see show up in one of these, please let me know.

I can't tell you how much I am relieved that we're doing Path Among Stars right. She and I were both slightly concerned that it wouldn't work as well as we hoped. Yeah, we had a lot of fun writing the Lennata/Lewa fight. Each "move" we made came as a surprise to the other. She and I are very proud of our "motley crew" as you put it :). There is still one final member to introduce, our Krogan. Wait until you meet our villains. As fun as it is to write a hero, bringing a decent villain to life is even more fun. Be on the look out for familiar faces to show up throughout the series (We're even talking/writing a bunch of little scenes of the group interacting with the Normandy Crew from ME2 i.e. Iysis/Mordin, Nikolai/Samara).

O_O I hadn't realized that the DA upload had screwed with bits. Thank you for bringing that to my attention. Will try to go and edit that as soon as I can.

I am totally with you on the drawing aspect. I can't draw....at all :D. However, LALA did a great job bringing some of our characters to life. I will continue to practice my writing. I've got scenes already written out for Path Among Stars, problem is they are all over the place in terms of timeline XD.

Thanks so much for the wonderful support and taking time out of your day to read my stories. Keep up your amazing work as well. :D
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:iconnethalf:
Gifs are totally awesome! But Y U NO TURIAN CHOCOLATE CONVERSATION!?
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:iconmaqeurious:
maqeurious May 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh, I never knew of this!!! Crap! I just looked it up on youtube :(
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:iconnethalf:
Stupid sexy Garrus. He missed the point with the chocolate.
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:iconnethalf:
I mean soundboards, not those gifs, ofc.
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:iconsecretbroker:
SecretBroker May 19, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
your animated gifs are amazing...and this all other things( I don't even know how to name them ^^;) ... I would love to do something so amazing with computer :D I only know how to use pencil (also tablet pencil, but not really :D )
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